Feedback!

This is the feedback we received when we showed our second draft to the group of year 9 students that we originally showed our pitch to. 


Effective camera work.
Good - Really liked the shots where you focused in and out, and the speeding up/slowing down of shots.
Really good! :)

I liked the props and the smashing, glitter, smoke etc. It portrays the dark effect. 

Good slow motion cup scenes.
Well set out, well planned and portrayed.
Very good! :)
I liked the narrative in the different parts and the things getting smashed up looked really good.
Good location and props.
Song fits, good editing, good location, fits the Alice in Wonderland Theme.
I liked the coloured powders.
Seemed professional/well made.
Good ideas, good setting, matched the song.
I loved the outfits because they really fitted the song and it's a really good music video.
I liked that you had the same person playing chess on both sides. 
The music was good and the video fitted it really well.
I thought that the mirrors and the "blood" pouring into the cup was good. 
Very detailed and co-ordinated, very good overall, no negatives.
Good song, well set out, like how you have done it in slow motion at some parts.
It's really good :)
Good ideas and good camera angles.
Good costumes and setting.
Flashing images and people appearing was very interesting and made it a lot better. 
I particularly liked the powder paint and the smoke. 
I thought that it was really good and reflected the song's feeling. 
It was good but it would be cool if you threw a rock at the bass drum to break the skin but that could be expensive. 
Could have had a bit better acting but it was good.
Certain images may require darkening in order to fit the genre and theme.
Get a variety of different camera angles for each shot, also flit between some shots a bit quicker.

More flashing images maybe? More rock like if you do flashing images. 

Could use a freakier set.
I thought that making Alice overturn the dinner table would have suited.
Maybe do a scene where it's quite dark to make it seem more dark and mysterious.
The song is very dramatic so more action would be better such as a fight at the table.
Could have a birds eye view for more camera angles.
Could make it more scary.
She should look in a long mirror then start smashing it.
At the end it should show her finding the way out of the forest and smiling. 
Band could be a bit more enthusiastic.
Words too out of time with the singer.
A bit repetitive on the scenes, needs something a bit different.